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Sunday, November 27

  1. page J edited ... Revised: Caroline/Amanda/Erin) "Peter hurry up, you don't want to be late for your…

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    "Peter hurry up, you don't want to be late for your first day of work," exclaimed Mrs. Miller.
    Peter rushed down the stairs, grabbed his coat, and lunch, then went right out the door...
    Peter worked at a new pet store and his task for the day was to sort and organize the fish and birds into their particular spots.
    As he unlocked the door he thought to himself, how hard could this be?
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    by simply separtaingseparating the fish
    The animals were organized by shelves (in pictures we will explain how everything was organized with little side notes).
    The owner came back to check on Peter and how he was doing. He was very pleased with Peter's work and even asked him to draw a diagram so they could remember how the animals were organized.
    The owner could not have been more pleased!
    What are other ways that Peter could have classified animals?
    Comments:
    1. Incorporate open-ended mathematical questions throughout the story. Refer to the project rubric. Proofread. I expect more from your group since there are three of you collaborating on this project.
    2. First half of the story is long just for the context. Add more data analysis terms to make the story more relevant to your topic. You may refer to our EMM book chapter on data analysis for some terms.
    3. Make each paragraph or section of the story engaging to read.
    4. Think of creative ways to use visuals to supplement the classifications.
    5. Strengthen the mathematics content.
    Expand more on the concept of classifying. For example, be accurate in terms of the types of fish and how they are classified based on color, habitat, size, and diet. Research some science information and types of pet fish and birds for your story. Be realistic and accurate.
    Make the science, math, and literature more realistic and accurate. Do some research.
    Add mathematics questions at the end of the story as extension activity that focuses on classifying real objects based on common properties.

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  2. page I edited ... 20. On the car ride home, Tracy told her parents about all of the animals she saw at the zoo. …
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    20. On the car ride home, Tracy told her parents about all of the animals she saw at the zoo. But more importantly, she talked about the different shapes she saw today.
    22. "while I was looking for you, all I could do was count the different in sides and angles in each family. But now that I think about it, it's really cool that even though we all have our differences, we have sides and angles in common. That's what makes us shapes!"
    Comments:
    1. Incorporate open-ended questions throughout the story. Refer to the project rubric. Proofread. Be consistent throughout the story in referring to parents as parents and not shapes.
    2. Refer to our EMM book or some websites as references for specific properties of each polygon. Your story focuses on comparison and contrast. Be clear with one to one comparison. Make the shape descriptions based on properties (sides, angles, etc) explicit and accurate.
    3. Line 4, a 4-equal side shape could also be a rhombus. Add more characteristics of a square to be clear you are referring to it and not a rhombus. Line 5, be consistent in using either parents or shapes when referring to the mom and dad. Again, research specific properties of a circle and incorporate in your descriptions. Line 6, use appropriate mathematics terms to decribe a star as a polygon. Compare any relationship between a star shape polygon and a triangle. Again, focus on properties. Line 21, redo how you describe a rhombus. Line 10, don't call it triangle toucan but triangle shaped beak toucan or something else. Lines, 14, 15, and 16, be specific and accurate on describing the shapes. Include more properties per shape.
    4. Think of creative ways to use visuals. Make each paragraph or section of the story engaging to read.
    5. Add mathematics questions at the end of the story as extension activity that focuses on informal to formal units of measure.

    A. Math Taxonomy: Geometry
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  3. page F edited ... Bella and Owen run outside."Mr. Giant, can you lay down in the leaves again? We're going …
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    Bella and Owen run outside."Mr. Giant, can you lay down in the leaves again? We're going to measure you with rulers!"
    "WOAH! Mr. Giant, you are 17 rulers tall!"
    Comments:
    1. Use shorter and more concise sentences. Incorporate open-ended questions throughout the story. Refer to the project rubric. Proofread.
    2. First half of the story is too long just for the context. Add some measurement facts to make the story full of measurement concepts. You may refer to our EMM book chapter on measurement for some concepts.
    3. Make each paragraph or section of the story engaging to read. Revise the closing part.
    4. Think of creative ways to use visuals.
    5. Strengthen the mathematics content.
    Expand more on the concept of informal units of measure. You presented a good start when Bella and Owen start measuring the tall man. Use 2 different objects as informal units of measure (small to big) before using a ruler.
    Make the information realistic. 17 rulers (assuming you are referring to a standard ruler) is too tall.
    Add mathematics questions at the end of the story as extension activity that focuses on informal to formal units of measure.

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  4. page D edited ... Mr. Castle decided to look at the rest of the bridge to see if there were any hints as to why …
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    Mr. Castle decided to look at the rest of the bridge to see if there were any hints as to why the number 4 plank fit right next to the number 2 plank. The planks of wood on the bridge said, "0, 2, 4, blank, 8, 10, 12." "Of course!" said Mr. Castle, slapping his forehead, "The planks are a pattern of even numbers! A number 6 plank must go in that empty spot!" But when Mr. Castle looked through the pile of wood, he didn't see any number 6 planks; only two number 3 planks, a number 8 plank, and a number 1 plank.
    Mr. Castle was stumped. "Why isn't there a number 6 plank? That's the number I need!" Mr. Castle searched deep into his brain..."1 is way too small and 8 is already in the pattern and it's too big. All I have left are two number 3 planks." Mr. Castle stared at the planks for a long time until a thought popped in his head. "Wait! I can try putting the two number 3 planks next to each other." Mr. Castle tested this theory. He slowly nailed the first number 3 plank in and it seemed to stay put. With his eyes closed and using one big swing, he nailed the last nail into the second number 3 plank. He opened his eyes and the bridge was complete. "Two 3 planks make a 6 plank! The bridge is complete and safe to cross now." Mr. Castle crossed his newly-mended bridge and continued his journey through the forest.
    Comments:
    1. Use shorter and more concise sentences. Refer to the project rubric. Proofread.
    2. Eliminate 0 in the sequence of even numbers since it is not relevant to the context of story.
    3. Make each paragraph engaging to read.
    4. Think of creative ways to use visuals.
    5. Strengthen the mathematics content.
    On paragraph, expand more on the concept of even number. Research on facts about even numbers and incorporate some of them in throughout your story. Example, http://www.factmonster.com/ipka/A0876700.html.
    Add mathematics questions at the end of the story as extension activity that follows the mystery theme.

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Monday, November 21

  1. page J edited ... Genre: Fiction (Revised) (To be Revised: Caroline/Amanda/Erin) "Peter hurry up, y…

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    Genre: Fiction (Revised)(To be Revised: Caroline/Amanda/Erin)
    "Peter hurry up, you don't want to be late for your first day of work," exclaimed Mrs. Miller.
    Peter rushed down the stairs, grabbed his coat, and lunch, then went right out the door...
    Peter worked at a new pet store and his task for the day was to sort and organize the fish and birds into their particular spots.
    As he unlocked the door he thought to himself, how hard could this be?
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    they ate.
    The animals were organized by shelves (in pictures we will explain how everything was organized with little side notes).
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    were organized.
    The

    The
    owner could
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    more pleased!
    What are other ways that Peter could have classified animals?
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  2. page F edited ... Measurement, Genre: Type Here Type your story here. Fiction TO BE REVISED- LIZ AND ASHL…

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    Measurement, Genre: Type Here
    Type your story here.
    Fiction
    TO BE REVISED- LIZ AND ASHLEY

    It was fall. Bella and Owen's favorite time of year because Bella's backyard lead into a forest. This meant that they could rake large piles of leaves and jump in them. Bella found Owen during recess and exclaimed, "You need to come over after to school, so we can play in the forest!"
    "Yes, I've been waiting to do this since the leaves started changing colors." Bella and Owen were fidgety all day in anticipation for their afternoon ahead. Bella's mom picked them up from school. As they arrived home, they rushed into the shed, grabbed two rakes, and charged into the backyard.
    As Bella and Owen raked leaves and piled them up, they couldn't be more excited. "I can't wait to jump in this enormous pile of leaves!" exclaimed Owen. "Me neither! Let's keep piling the leaves up; this pile is almost bigger than us!" said Bella. The two friends continued to work, building the pile bigger and bigger until it towered over their heads. As they worked, they noticed someone walk up to them. A tall man whose pants only went to his knees and used a rope as a belt approached them. Bella and Owen's mouths dropped as they tilted their heads back as far as they could go. The man said, "Can I help you with your pile of leaves?" Bella with her eyes wide smiled and said, "Of course! With your help we'll be done in no time!" The tall man didn't need to use the rake. He simply used his hands to pick up some leaves and already had a pile larger than Bella and Owen's. "How tall are you, sir?" asked Bella in the most curious voice. "....well, I'm not really sure. You see, I'm very tall but I don't quite know how to measure myself," said the giant. "We can help you! Let's see how tall you are," said Owen as he looked over to Bella for approval. "Okay, but how are we going to measure him?"
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    Use this."
    The giant falls back into the pile of leaves, so the kids can measure him. Owen and Bella gather several sticks. They line the sticks up next to the giant. Owen counts the sticks. "You are 37 sticks long, Mr. Giant." Bella, confused, says, "That's not right. All of the sticks are different lengths. Let's try something else. Mr. Giant, go stand next to that tree."
    Owen gasps, "That won't work either. You're taller than that tree! How are we going to measure you?!"
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    Bella comes rushing into the room, "I found two rulers. We can each takes turns measuring the giant by placing one ruler down at a time. Then we can count how many rulers long the giant is."
    Bella and Owen run outside."Mr. Giant, can you lay down in the leaves again? We're going to measure you with rulers!"
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    17 rulers tall!anytall!"
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  3. page D edited B. Strand: Number Sense, Genre: Mystery (to be revised) Molly and Caitlin Mr. Castle was walkin…
    B. Strand: Number Sense, Genre: Mystery (to be revised)
    Molly and Caitlin
    Mr. Castle was walking through the forest when he came across a small bridge; the bridge was made of wood, but there were two planks missing. He noticed each plank of wood on the bridge had a number painted on it and there was a pile of unused wood sitting next to the bridge. Mr. Castle wanted to get across the bridge so he decided to nail in two random planks of wood labeled 10 and 7. When he tried to put the wood in the empty spot, though, the wood wiggled away and wouldn't stay in the spot! Mr. Castle realized there must be a pattern to follow in order to get the wood in the right place so he could cross the bridge safely. But how was he supposed to know the pattern?
    Mr. Castle wrestled his way through the pile of wood. He tried to find the pieces that looked the most sturdy, that way they would stay on the bridge when he nailed them in this time! Mr. Castle found two more pieces that he thought would do the trick. On these two pieces of wood he saw the numbers 3 and 4. When he bent down to nail the number 3 plank into place, he saw that the number before it was the number 2. "Perfect! 3 comes after 2!" Mr. Castle nailed the wood in place, but to his surprise...it started to wiggle and it slipped right out! Since he still had the plank with the number 4 written on it, he tried to nail it in just to see if it fit. He nailed it in next to the number 2 plank....and it fit! Why would this be?
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  4. page I edited ... (To be revised) revised- Emily and Hillary) Start typing your story here. 23. title pa…

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    (To be revised)revised- Emily and Hillary)
    Start typing your story here.
    23. title page
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  5. page J edited ... Analysis, Genre: Mystery Fiction (Revised) "Peter hurry up, you don't want to be l…

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    Analysis, Genre: MysteryFiction (Revised)
    "Peter hurry up, you don't want to be late for your first day of work," exclaimed Mrs. Miller.
    Peter rushed down the stairs, grabbed his coat, and lunch, then went right out the door...
    When he was half way to work he realized he had forgotten the one peice of paper his boss had told him he needed for work that day.
    Peter
    Peter worked at
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    and organize all the animalsfish and birds into their
    As he unlocked the door he thought to himself, how hard could this be?
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    walked into PoochesPets 'R Us
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    day of work when he noticed that some of the animals' habitats were not very organized.work. The owner
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    shipment of animalsfish and birds, so PeterPeter's task would have to come in earlybe to help
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    them by both classification (mammal, insect, bird, fish, amphibian, and reptile) and price.3 pm. After glancing
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    a very long day. Onhard job. He decided to start by simply separtaing the first shelf he saw a fish bowl, a cage with a very hungry cat inside, and a small crate with a large snake. In fact,from birds. He quickly realized this would not only was the entire pet store not arranged by animal, but the animals that were nextbe helpful enough for costumers to each otherfind what they were quite dangerous! Peter knewlooking for. So, he hadthen began to start rearrangingseparate the animals right away before any of them got hurt.
    Peter thought for a moment
    fish and decided to first rearrange the animals that were alreadybirds based on habitat. He then grouped the selves. He put each type of animalfish based on its own shelf. The fish bowl stayed were it was, the cateither living in salt water or fresh water, and its cage were moved togrouped the shelf below andbirds by size. When he finished he still was not satisfied with how he arranged the the snake and its crate were moved to a shelf on the other side of the room.animals. Peter continuedthen decided to placeorganize the existing animalsfish based on color, and organize the proper shelves. All the fishbirds by what they ate.
    The animals
    were movedorganized by shelves (in pictures we will explain how everything was organized with little side notes).
    The owner came back
    to the first shelf, the cats to the shelf underneath,check on Peter and the snakes to the shelf no the other side of the room. Peterhow he was doing. He was very pleased with hisPeter's work until he remembered that the owner had said something aboutand even asked him to draw a new shipment of animals. This time sortingdiagram so they could remember how the animals was easier since he knew exactly where they should go.were organized.
    The owner could not have been more pleased!
    What are other ways that Peter could have classified animals?

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  6. page F edited ... "Yes, I've been waiting to do this since the leaves started changing colors." Bella …
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    "Yes, I've been waiting to do this since the leaves started changing colors." Bella and Owen were fidgety all day in anticipation for their afternoon ahead. Bella's mom picked them up from school. As they arrived home, they rushed into the shed, grabbed two rakes, and charged into the backyard.
    As Bella and Owen raked leaves and piled them up, they couldn't be more excited. "I can't wait to jump in this enormous pile of leaves!" exclaimed Owen. "Me neither! Let's keep piling the leaves up; this pile is almost bigger than us!" said Bella. The two friends continued to work, building the pile bigger and bigger until it towered over their heads. As they worked, they noticed someone walk up to them. A tall man whose pants only went to his knees and used a rope as a belt approached them. Bella and Owen's mouths dropped as they tilted their heads back as far as they could go. The man said, "Can I help you with your pile of leaves?" Bella with her eyes wide smiled and said, "Of course! With your help we'll be done in no time!" The tall man didn't need to use the rake. He simply used his hands to pick up some leaves and already had a pile larger than Bella and Owen's. "How tall are you, sir?" asked Bella in the most curious voice. "....well, I'm not really sure. You see, I'm very tall but I don't quite know how to measure myself," said the giant. "We can help you! Let's see how tall you are," said Owen as he looked over to Bella for approval. "Okay, but how are we going to measure him?"
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    Use this."
    The giant falls back into the pile of leaves, so the kids can measure him. Owen and Bella gather several sticks. They line the sticks up next to the giant. Owen counts the sticks. "You are 37 sticks long, Mr. Giant." Bella, confused, says, "That's not right. All of the sticks are different lengths. Let's try something else. Mr. Giant, go stand next to that tree."
    Owen gasps, "That won't work either. You're taller than that tree! How are we going to measure you?!"
    How would YOU measure Mr. Giant?
    Owen and Bella go into the house in search of something that they can use to measure the giant.
    "Will this work (random objects that Bella and Owen pick up)?"
    Bella comes rushing into the room, "I found two rulers. We can each takes turns measuring the giant by placing one ruler down at a time. Then we can count how many rulers long the giant is."
    Bella and Owen run outside."Mr. Giant, can you lay down in the leaves again? We're going to measure you with rulers!"
    "WOAH! Mr. Giant, you are 17 rulers tall!any

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